Stuck in my head (2)

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Stuck in my head.

This post is a new poem I wanted to re-blog. I would love more reviews of this peace. Feel free to say what ever you want, I can take criticism.

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About artfulhelix

I'm a mother to three beautiful boys, 8 years, 2 years, and 1 year old, all there birthdays in April with mine (very busy month). I am a wife to a wonderful man who supports every thing I want to do. I have 10 piercings and 11 tattoos, more tattoos coming soon. I am an artist, painting, tattooing, sculpting (haven't done that for a long time), poetry, and a few small crafts. As an artist I felt writing was the next logical step for me. I am enjoying every minute of it, writing, blogging (never thought I would blog), and critiquing. I not only want to talk about my book and the writing proses, but art in general in my blog. I would like to share a poem I wrote a few years ago, but is so me. I came up with it when a very old woman came up to me on the side walk and said " Do you know you are going to hell?" laughing a little inside I said "No, why am I going to hell?" "Because you have desecrated the lords temple with all your piercings and tattoos!" She looks so serious when she said this. I said "I'm not desecrating, I'm decorating!" well that made her mad of course, and she stomped off. later I wrote this: You look at me that way in disgust and disdain I’m pierced and tattooed I must be insane But who are you to judge when you kneel down and pray Just because our beliefs are not the same We are not so different you and I for we are all the same when we die This is nothing against religion, merely about judgment in general. Can't wait to share more of what I love and who I am.

4 responses »

  1. i really like you poem – i like how the language was sparse but still very descriptive, very recognisable to anyone who has experienced writer’s block – i liked how it was structured, like a story, with a beginning, a middle and an end – i tried to think of something less positive to say but couldn’t really: spelling? – most i liked its irony: a piece of writing about not writing, very clever

    • Thank you. It actualy started out ass a normal post, but became a poem. I have bin told I don’t have a normal stial. I was corected on the spelling on a nother site I posted it to. Thank you for the comment, I am happy with this peace considering it was off the top of my head.

      • I think its good to have your own style and often top-of-the-head stuff is the best ever poetry – as for spelling, i don’t think its really important and if you always spell the same word the same way then it just becomes part of your style 🙂

      • I agree wholeheartedly! I was getting bashed all the time on this one writers site I joined so I stopped going. Its the only place that has happened. Thanks for liking my post for my son. He was so happy to see that people where liking it. Thanks again, always nice to hear from others. My blog is only 2 moths old so I still don’t get a lot of comments.

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