Christmas poem

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so I wrote this poem this morning, its rough but I like it. I need some critiquing on the poem so feel free to tell me what you think, I can take it lol. I wrote this poem in like 5 minutes so I Need to work on it, but it never hurts to share.

When snow falls and the air is chilly

When winter comes and we all get silly

We work all year and do our part

We’ve bin good for goodness sake

As children yell “its time to wake”

Has Santa come and gone again

Run and see presents under the tree

The kids so thrilled we laugh and sing

Its Christmas day its come again

I’m glad to share it with you my friend

SO I know some of it doesn’t work but tell me what you think.

Marry Christmas from ArtfulHelix and family

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About artfulhelix

I'm a mother to three beautiful boys, 8 years, 2 years, and 1 year old, all there birthdays in April with mine (very busy month). I am a wife to a wonderful man who supports every thing I want to do. I have 10 piercings and 11 tattoos, more tattoos coming soon. I am an artist, painting, tattooing, sculpting (haven't done that for a long time), poetry, and a few small crafts. As an artist I felt writing was the next logical step for me. I am enjoying every minute of it, writing, blogging (never thought I would blog), and critiquing. I not only want to talk about my book and the writing proses, but art in general in my blog. I would like to share a poem I wrote a few years ago, but is so me. I came up with it when a very old woman came up to me on the side walk and said " Do you know you are going to hell?" laughing a little inside I said "No, why am I going to hell?" "Because you have desecrated the lords temple with all your piercings and tattoos!" She looks so serious when she said this. I said "I'm not desecrating, I'm decorating!" well that made her mad of course, and she stomped off. later I wrote this: You look at me that way in disgust and disdain I’m pierced and tattooed I must be insane But who are you to judge when you kneel down and pray Just because our beliefs are not the same We are not so different you and I for we are all the same when we die This is nothing against religion, merely about judgment in general. Can't wait to share more of what I love and who I am.

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