So I have posted my first draft prologue and my first draft first chapter. The thing is my critiquer said my prologue isn’t needed, the first part of my first chapter dose the work for the prologue. On the other hand my sister and one of my best friends think its awesome and want to read more. Now I stand at a cross rode, do I keep my prologue and move forward with my book, or do I make it into a short story for something else and move forward with my book. I don’t know what to do. I like my prologue and if I don’t use it for my book then I want to use it for something. my prologue is in posts: part one is in Information overload/ Nuclear war and then Prologue part 2. Terns out I didn’t post my first chapter, funny. I have lots to think about, I guess we will see how it terns out. Here is the first part of my first chapter (first draft). This snippet should do.
chapter one My name is Sora, named after one of my family, I was born the day the doors opened. So my birthday goes unnoticed every year, which is fine with me. I never have understood birthday celebrations, it's only the passing of another year. Besides age is nothing but a number, its what is in your heart and mind. You can be 45 and still be just like a child. How you carry yourself, the way you think, the path in life you choose, everything you say and do, we are our a ctions not our age. Like my dear uncle Rasputin, he throws fits like a child. This year I turn nineteen, no mater what happens I know I have a job to do. Take my father's place and lead our kind into battle for the future of all. Most start there training when finished with school, but my uncle has kept me a way from it all “for the memory of your father” he keeps saying. So when I take over I'll only have a short time to train with the others. None of them think I can do the job, mainly because I've never trained with them. What not a single one of them knows is, I have a special place no one else knows about, my very own oasis I spend all my spare time in. This week is the festival that is thrown every year in celebration of the day the door opened, the day our thousand year imprisonment underground ended. Let me explain how we got here, how the human race ran deep in the earth from our own mistakes, from the destruction we knew we would do. How human kind changed on the genetic level, and why we now have yet another war coming. Can human kind live without war or violence? Will we ever find peace and happiness, or one day destroy everyone and everything on this planet. We almost did over a thousand years ago, why not again. I intend to make sure it never happens. You see in 2009 some very wealthy people in congress and the white house got together and decided a nuclear war was coming, and that they would be the first to strike. The U.S. army struck the first blow 9-11-12, an anniversary of a terrorist strike against the U.S. The first nuclear bomb launched only 13 days later. It was only a matter of time with the way the world was going. Greedy government types taking all they can while homeless people fight for food, sleep in boxes and die from simple sickness out in the cold. Fat slobs watching this thing called television stuffing their faces with who knows what, men beating their wives, children dying in the streets. That is the world we left behind, the world that destroyed its self. With the help of engineers and scientists the U.S. built massive underground cities. Every city had a main square with shops, restaurants, game stores, playgrounds and a park with trees, flowers and a pond. we could grow trees and flowers and food because we have artificial sunlight. We have a public library stocked with thousands of books. I spend a lot of time there. Off from that in equal rooms like the square is ample lodging not only for the people locked away, but for the ones to be born. The doors closed early in 2012, months before the war began.